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July 15,2008

詩非詩, 10

[澄清]
路痴不會認路
但識字

難搞不是批評
是美譽

[再老也要談戀愛]*
髮蒼蒼
視茫茫
步履蹣跚找假牙

臉紅紅
心漾漾
狂風暴雨會情郎

[癖]
落枕為每晚課題
晨起即身陷地獄

拼圖賽結局難逆
吊車尾也要參與



備註: 該詩後半由 sunplant 提供

Posted by hikawac at 樂多Roodo! │10:44 │回應(23) │引用(0) │弗潤原創 >> 歇詩底里
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髮蒼蒼 ==> 臉紅紅
視茫茫 ==> 心漾漾
步履蹣跚找假牙 ==> 狂風暴雨會情郎

字不對, 意對.
Still LOL, ROTF, 滿地找牙.

#1?
Posted by YY at July 15,2008 10:57
what do you mean by "字不對,意對"?
Posted by hikawac at July 15,2008 11:44
真恭喜Grandpa 拔得頭香! ~~"

話沖沖
氣揚揚
苦其所苦不認同
盲其所盲才正當

朋友之義已辭窮
何必共陷泥沼中

(依自己最近的心情回應你一詩, 見諒! XD)
Posted by jcool at July 15,2008 13:26
怎麼覺得第一則有點眼熟哩 @@
Posted by 老迪 at July 15,2008 13:27
>>怎麼覺得第一則有點眼熟哩 @@
老迪也覺得是版主自己的寫照吧?
不過...

>>路痴不會認路
>>但識字
那.. 找到路了ㄇ? XPP...
Posted by jcool at July 15,2008 13:40
to jcool

寫詩幹嘛見諒?
非常歡迎啊
(除非那首詩是罵我的 XD)

to D

眼熟?
大概是那是之前的msn暱稱吧?

to jcool

>老迪也覺得是版主自己的寫照吧?
因為...
事實..就是這樣...XD

>那.. 找到路了ㄇ? XPP...
呃
旁邊的人找到了... :P
Posted by hikawac at July 15,2008 13:47
>>旁邊的人找到了... :P
那旁邊若是沒人, 就... 繼續當馬路孤兒ㄇ? :p
Posted by jcool at July 15,2008 14:00
>what do you mean by "字不對,意對"?

字(詞性)不對仗, 意思有對仗到.

Example,
意思有對仗到: (雖然)步履(已)蹣跚(到滿地)找假牙 ==> ( 仍然想在)狂風暴雨(中)會情郎

字(詞性)不對仗:
步履 ==> 狂風. Noun to Noun, OK.
蹣跚 =/=> 暴雨. Adverb to Noun. 不對仗~
You may argue that: 暴雨 = 暴雨(中) = Adverb , then OK. XD

From 臉紅紅 to 心漾漾 is 外在 to 內心; whereras,
both 髮蒼蒼 and 視茫茫 are 外在.

Also,
髮蒼蒼 (靜態)
視茫茫 (微動)
步履蹣跚找假牙 (慢動作)

臉紅紅 (微動)
心漾漾 (心動; 開始動)
狂風暴雨會情郎 (天搖地動)

The latter covers larger dynamic range. XD
Posted by YY at July 15,2008 14:01
Grandpa..
人有雙眼, 但此時, 應該..
睜一隻, 閉一隻... ^@"

話說回來...有請 grandpa 露一手吧! ^^
不要留一手唷 :p
Posted by jcool at July 15,2008 14:08
>>(除非那首詩是罵我的 XD)
ㄜ... 當然不是罵你的..
(os: 特赦令不夠用, 現在不敢 @@")
Posted by jcool at July 15,2008 14:09
Is ^@" = 睜一隻, 閉一隻 ?

>話說回來...有請 grandpa 露一手吧! ^^
不要留一手唷 :p

I am a scientist who is OK at analyzing,
but poor at creating (創作). ;=(

May I comfort myself by saying:
good reader is as important as writer?
(讀者是【逆溯作家】: 讀者透過想像欣賞文學作品的過程， 是一種再創造) XP
Posted by YY at July 15,2008 14:25
>臉紅紅,心漾漾..

好熟喔..
原來是po在這邊呀..
要不要我再提供幾個?
Posted by sunplant at July 15,2008 14:41
要再提供幾個更好啊

不過...
你對上述 YY 的言論
沒有想打人的衝動嗎?
我是邊覺得好笑邊想打人...@@
Posted by hikawac at July 16,2008 09:23
>我是邊覺得好笑邊想打人...@@

Why?
Posted by YY at July 16,2008 10:25
you didn't find your post "owing beating"?
Posted by hikawac at July 16,2008 12:49
喂~思無邪
Therefore,

>you didn't find your post "owing beating"?

No~~~ XD
Posted by YY at July 16,2008 13:38
Grandpa...
>>I am a scientist who is OK at analyzing,
analyze more and try to find out why martian thinks you -
>>>you didn't find your post "owing beating"?
~~"
Posted by jcool at July 16,2008 14:37
Need hints. @@a
Posted by YY at July 16,2008 15:13
>>Need hints. @@a
Rewind your memory and check your 2nd comment... - "字(詞性)不對仗, 意思有對仗到."
當火星版主詩興大發時... reader 只要跟著起詩或者看看就好... don't kuso around martian's creativity... although she did get entertained by it.. but.. still... :p
Posted by jcool at July 16,2008 17:01
IC, 3Q for the tips!

BTW,

>reader 只要跟著起"詩"或者看看就好

熊熊看成: 起乩
I must be still "owe beating"
Posted by YY at July 16,2008 17:35
>>I must be still "owe beating"
you finally got it! ~"~
Posted by jcool at July 16,2008 19:09
>I must be still "owe beating"
Y爺趕快跟 jcool 收購幾張特赦令來備用 XD
Posted by 小小肥 at July 16,2008 20:33
>>Y爺趕快跟 jcool 收購幾張特赦令來備用 XD
兩位爺....特赦令應該沒用...
因為火星版主是隨心情讓特赦令有效的.. XDD...
Posted by jcool at July 16,2008 23:37


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