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許小布英文日記：
I like French fries and ice-cream cone from McDonalds,
and my cousin, Wen, likes them, too.
We're always go to McDonalds.
I like drinking milk and black tea.
I like swimming in the natatorium.
The place I like the most is south in Taiwan.
because of south to have mountain and sea,then...fond of eating.

羅老師批文：
We're always go to McDonalds. (BE VERB 後面要ING, BE VERB 通常是形容用的, 所以這個時候應該用GO 的動詞原形就好, 因為你是描述一個事實)
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We always go to McDonalds

I like drinking milk and black tea.I like swimming in the natatorium.
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文法上沒有問題但是你上文跟下文跳的太不自然

The place I like the most is south in Taiwan.  (SOUTHERN TAIWAN-----台灣南部)
because of south to have mountain and sea,then...fond of eating. (because 要接子句, 所以你上一句不應該放句點, 應該直接接BECAUSE ; "台灣南部"不是人, 不能擁有, 所以不能用have要有there are(複數) )
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The place i like the most is in southern Taiwan because there are mountains,  beaches, and delicious food.

你可以說OCEAN VIEW, 但是還是不能說那裡有SEA
SEA 通常是說內海

修改如下：
I like French fries and ice-cream cone from McDonalds,
and my cousin, Wen, likes them, too.
We always go to McDonalds.
My favorite beverages are milk and black tea, and I like swimming in natatorium in my spare time.
The place i like the most is in southern Taiwan because there are mountains, beaches, and delicious food.

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